Of The Arrival

Genre: Mystery 

I know a shortcut

Those were the words beginning any unnecessarily long journey. They echoed about in the room as if the person who spoke them was there, with them.

“What is this?” Xinyori asked slightly unnerved

“Keep looking, stare deep into the heart of the bottle, tell me what you see.”“I see people planning for a traditional wedding ceremony, slaughtering a cow, I see many sleepless nights dressing chickens and cutting vegetables. I can feel the anticipation, it’s like watching a film on TV but its somehow different, I don’t know how to explain it. Is this a prediction how are you doing this?”

 

“It’s a little trick I picked up on my many  years of travel, if I told you how it all worked, well I would have to take your soul in exchange” he laughed then added “ I am only joking, don’t be so serious, think of it as a vision, when you look into the bottle, you see a possible future or maybe you see what you wish to happen, or what you fear to happen so much that it happens, either way these events may or may  not come to pass. Whose wedding is it, do you see?”

“I do not know.  I do not see anyone I recognize.”

“Do you recognize anything?”

“Yes, the cow that was slaughtered, the brown heifer with the white spot the shape of a heart, that’s Perfection. I named it Perfection after the soap, its’s mine,  that’s my cow, my grandfather gifted it to me. This can only mean that it is in preparation for my wedding, unless I gave it to my brother or someone else.

I also recognize a walking stick, the cow before it was killed, was hit over the head with the stick. The walking stick has the likeness of a snail’s shell carved onto its top and from that shell, what seems like a flame is coming out. It’s the symbol of my family and tribe.

The people are now just waiting almost anxiously for the arrival of the bride.  The aunts  are ready with pieces of cloth which they will throw on the ground,  so that when she does arrive, her first step into the homestead will not be onto the dirt, but like a queen they will lay down cloth for her to walk on, as they chant “the bride is here

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Whispers have started among some of them they are silenced quickly but now the thought is already running loose in the minds of those who heard “what if she does not come……”

“Where is the bride? Look deep into the bottle tell me if you can see her”

“She is in a car, but something is wrong with the car, no, not the engine,  it does not have the proper registry papers, it’s a new car, a recent import, no license plate, so the driver sought to avoid police roadblocks and the tollgate as the car would have been stopped and impounded.

He is the one who said “I know a shortcut” He took a detour into a dust road track that should have halved their travelling time, but its been raining, he did not take this into consideration, the car got stuck in muddy creek and the is no mobile phone service to call for rescue__”

“Did you see who the bride is?”

“No, her face was veiled with a scarf around her head and she was draped with something like a sheet. “

“Some secrets, the universe keeps to itself.  Right then.” He said taking the bottle away from X, “That concludes the free demonstration of just a little bit of what I can I do, anything extra you will have to start paying, and you happen to be in a money fix, yes?”

“About tha___”

“Ah the world is full of things money can’t buy that is why favours and such go a long way, you do a little something for me, and I do something for you.”

“It depends what you will have me do” alarm in his tone of voice.

“Oh don’t look alarmed, nothing illegal dear boy, well mostly non illegal, maybe the ethics might be slightly questionable but, your family is no stranger to bending the moral compass, yes?”

He winked and Xinyori felt as he had signed away a tiny piece of his soul.

The thing with souls, you never lost a part of it, you lost all of it.

~The End

My entry this week for the #BlogBattle themed arrival…

the story continues from here

Responses to “Of The Arrival”

  1. commonsensegal avatar

    This is really great 🙂 , I curios to know what happens next. But I will patiently wait to see how it unfolds. I wonder who is the bride behind the sheet and if the one with the bottle is into collecting souls. X has to thread carefully before he promises anything further…because some things cannot be undone. Thanks for sharing and peace to you 🙂 .

    1. Beaton avatar

      Thank you so much for popping by….
      I am glad you were intrigued ^_^
      ooooh you have patience?? I have no idea; believe it or not how the story is progressing….. I have my suspicions.
      but yep becareful what promises you make especially to strange doctors with mysterious bottles ^_^

  2. blondeusk avatar

    Nice work!

    1. Beaton avatar

      Thanks ^_^

  3. Rachael Ritchey avatar

    Ooooo, this doctor is a sly one! X is getting a run for his money, or lack thereof! 🙂

    1. Beaton avatar

      hahahaha indeed ^_^
      poor X maybe??
      The doctor gives me goosebumps though, I dont know if he is a good fake or he really is erm… gifted
      ~B

      I guess will see

      1. Rachael Ritchey avatar

        I am looking forward to finding out in both cases! 🙂

  4. rasla avatar

    reading between the minds leaves you mystified…as always. 😉

    1. Beaton avatar

      it is a mystery……
      Thanks R
      ~B

  5. victoryosaretin avatar

    I enjoyed every bit of this

    1. Beaton avatar

      Thanks for popping by ^_^
      Glad you liked it
      ~B

  6. phoenixgrey85 avatar

    Interesting… Would love to take a peak into that bottle. 🙂

    1. Beaton avatar

      hahahaha careful the bottle might take a peak into you ^_^

      1. phoenixgrey85 avatar

        Oo-err. Better be careful then! 😀

      2. Beaton avatar

        constant vigilance ^_^

  7. Marje @ Kyrosmagica avatar

    Oh dear signing away your soul really is a dodgy thing to do! I particularly liked this bit of speech: “Oh don’t look alarmed, nothing illegal dear boy, well mostly non illegal, maybe the ethics might be slightly questionable but, your family is no stranger to bending the moral compass, yes?” That got me laughing!

    1. Beaton avatar

      hahahaha Confession I loved that bit too I was laughing as I wrote that and I Imagined The DOctOR chuckled and added a conspiratorial winked as he said that

      1. Marje @ Kyrosmagica avatar

        Great minds think alike Beaton!!! LOL

  8. cathleentownsend avatar

    Nice. I particularly enjoyed the cultural details of the wedding and the great pics. Looking forward to next week’s installment. 🙂

  9. Candice avatar

    You are a master with dialogue. The conversation between the characters is effortless and really makes the story flow , painting the images we need to see without so much being told with wordy description…which also isn’t a bad thing 😉

  10. JoHanna Massey avatar

    This is delicious reading. Excellent writing. Thank you.

    1. Beaton avatar

      Oooooooh delicious? this is a new compliment I like it glad you liked it
      Thank you ^_^

  11. Faraday's Candle avatar

    Wonderful writing B.

    1. Beaton avatar

      Thank you very much, glad you liked it ^_^
      ~B

  12. Colleen avatar

    Yeeeeesss I am loving the story line. Keep up the good work.

    1. Beaton avatar

      Thanks ^_^
      Glad you love it
      ~B

  13. […] a continuation of sorts from here  mostly and also here  and maybe here […]

  14. M. L. Kappa avatar

    Cool blog!

    1. Beaton avatar

      Thank you ^^)

  15. […] NewsFlash: me too I don’t know yet but it will be fun finding out and the story continued from HERE so you know the story so far […]

  16. marypamela avatar

    This is very intriguing B. I love going back and learning about the backstory of these two interesting characters.

    1. Beaton avatar

      For now each story is almost a complete short story but together its a work in project this story goes back even further and it still has places to go…
      Thanks for following it up ♥☻

      1. marypamela avatar

        Really? Wow! How far back does it go? I think it works better together. Each piece builds on each other. I think once you finish it, you should have it published backwards. Lol

      2. Beaton avatar

        I was randomly doing short stories then the idea hit me: that hey, what if eventually each piece is part of the one story……
        hmmmm I like the idea of it being published backwards, like a Curious Case of Benjamin Button, You start at the end and the go forward but backwards to the very beginning. lol

      3. marypamela avatar

        More of the story slowly revealed as you move backwards. For me, it was like opening a present or removing layers to find the prize. 😉

      4. Beaton avatar

        I ♥ that visual… and love presents nicely wrapped up 🙂

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