Of a brother’s keeper

Genre: Mystery/Crime 

He liked to imagine himself as some sort of Godfather just like in the movies. He did not just watch mafia movies, he devoured them, memorised all the lines. The duvet covering his bed had lots of fish designs on it, and thus he slept with the fishies every night and lived to tell about it.

Walking into the kitchen, he opened the fridge and took out the milk. He drank it straight from the bottle because he was hardcore. Hardcore, that meant he was tough as nails, unlike James, his brother, who was in the next room, probably still crying. “Suck it up” he had told him “Men do not cry.

People always assumed he was the older brother, not just because he was bigger or that he spoke with a certain authority, that demanded obedience, but the way he spoke first, answered for the both of them and fought his battles.

Swigging his milk, as if it was snake venom that could kill a cow from a hundred paces, he went to check on his brother. Anything he did, he made to look gangster, it was all about the right attitude. James was trying hard not to show that he had been crying, he knew his brother despised any sign of weakness.

“See, I told you it was just scratches, but you almost had me convinced you were dying” and indeed now that he was all cleaned up, there was nothing more serious than scrapes, no bandages were even needed. James looked suitably sheepish as he replied “I felt like I was dying. Thank you for carrying me home.”

“You are not heavy at all you are my brother” he said with a smile. “To business” suddenly all serious as he took a sip from his milk “you know this injustice must be answered blood for blood. I’ll call up the troop, they are good little soldiers afraid of nothing, except me.”

Soon they were all gathered in the tool-shed at the back of the house. The door was bolted shut and would not be opened to anyone who did not know the secret way of knocking. Club houses had to be secure, it said so in the rules he had written. One had to live by certain code of conduct, otherwise you fell for everything. “Gentlemen” he begun “One of mine was attacked today, he was minding his own business and some fell creature jumped him. I am my brother’s keeper and the brute must learn his lesson, it also serves as a warning to others. I keep my brother. I will dine on the bones of one who crosses me, gentlemen we go to war.” The army of six all yelled huzzah in unison.

They spent the entire afternoon seeking out their mark but failed to find it. “The beast seems to have gone underground, must’ve figured out we were coming for it” he finally concluded “but I have a plan __”

Just then a tall shadow loomed right over where they were crouching and an authoritative voice along with it.
“Boys, it’s time to come inside and your friends must run along home now, it’s getting rather late.”

“Yes mother” he replied
Mum can we have goose for dinner tomorrow?
“Yes my darlings, why not.”
“Troop, tomorrow we eat the beast!”
Huzzah!!” the other boys cheered.

~The End.

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Responses to “Of a brother’s keeper”

  1. #BlogBattle 24 “Troop” Entries & Voting | Writing Rachael Ritchey avatar

    […] Of a Brother’s Keeper by Beaton M @ Becoming the Muse […]

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  2. blondeusk avatar

    Great story! Good use of troop

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Thank you for reading ^_^

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  3. Sarah Brentyn avatar

    Hey, my fellow newbie blogbattler! Haha! “he slept with the fishies every night and lived to tell about it.” This is great. Didn’t expect the goose. Nice one. 🙂

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Hi Sarah ^_^ Thanks, be wary of geese have you ever seen them in action… and they taste just like chicken too hahaha

      apprecviate 🙂

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      1. Sarah Brentyn avatar

        Hmm… Not sure what they taste like but those birds can be aggressive! They’re little devils with white wings.

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      2. Beaton avatar

        I think, they think that they are dogs, feral rabid beasts hissing and all

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      3. Sarah Brentyn avatar

        The hissing, attacking… They are brutal! And don’t try to run. Those things can run!

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      4. Beaton avatar

        good thing they dont fly (well the ones that have chased me do not)

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  4. Rawls E. Fantasy avatar

    “Swigging his milk, as if it was snake venom that could kill a cow from a hundred paces,”–Lol, had me laughing! These brothers sound fun. The beast turned out to be a goose, haha, nice. 🙂

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Geese can be very violent you know Hahaha I am convinced sometimes they think they are beasts.
      Thanks for reading.

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      1. Rawls E. Fantasy avatar

        I’ve seen violent geese in videos, haha, I try to stay away from them in real life. 😀

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      2. Beaton avatar

        but sometimes they look oh so swanlike and graceful

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  5. ssenlrak avatar

    My favorite line “The duvet covering his bed had lots of fish designs on it, and thus he slept with the fishies every night and lived to tell about it.” Great story, loved it.

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    1. Beaton avatar

      glad you loved it. Thanks for reading
      ~B

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  6. Marje @ Kyrosmagica avatar

    Great ending, you had me guessing…. the tall shadow of the mum…. yes us mums are fierce creatures!

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    1. Beaton avatar

      from the vantage point of a certain height.. absloutely!!
      thank you for reading 🙂

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  7. Rachael Ritchey avatar

    Karl read this out loud to me and the boys last night. Hilarious! He used fun voices and everything. Very relatable. ❤

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  8. Beaton avatar

    Hahaha I can imagine, I read it out for my nephew and niece, we were sitting in the dark, because of a loadshedding power outage and I said come I read you a story from the internet. 🙂
    its way more fun read out loud.

    Glad you enjoyed it.

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  9. bobbibowwoman avatar

    Enjoyable, fun, creative. Oh my…sleeps with the fishes…haha

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    1. Beaton avatar

      lil tiny fishes hahaha

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  10. phoenixgrey85 avatar

    Loved the twist at the end. “Tomorrow we eat the best” – a goose. 😀 Brilliant.

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    1. Beaton avatar

      hahaha tastes just like chicken too
      glad you liked it Thank you for reading 😉

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  11. erinkenobi2893 avatar

    LOVE the twist ending! 😀

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Nothing is ever as it seems hey ^_^

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  12. ghostmmnc avatar

    I liked the way the story ended…with the beast being a goose! They can be aggressive, I know. I’ve never eaten one, but we have thousands who winter over at the playa lake by our house. They are so noisy, day and night! Thanks for a great read!

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    1. Beaton avatar

      I am sure sometimes they think they are dogs or something hahaha
      Thank you for reading, glad you loved the story ^_^

      ~B

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