Of The Waiting Room

Genre: mystery (I think)

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He finally gave in, after ten continuous days of taking the cough mixture, the cough was persistent. It said so on the bottle, do not take for more than ten days without consulting your doctor. He did not have a particularly bad flu and he was sure it was not bird flu or that one that killed you just a few days later. He was still alive after all but the symptoms were really annoying, so off to the doctor he finally decided.

The doctor’s surgery was a recently  renovated house in a quiet part of the city. It would have been a cosy house with a beautiful garden complete with a birdbath and some garden gnomes. He had paused to admire the scenery before he knocked once and entered, a bell chimed.

The lady at the reception looked up and gestured for him to wait as she was serving someone. He looked around for a place to sit, to his dismay, every chair was taken. Then he spotted a stool in the corner it would have to do.

Soon as he sat down, the receptionist was motioning him over. Walking back he struggled not to look tortured. He really was not a patient man.
An impatient patient. The irony.

“Good day, Sir, Do you have an appointment?” she asked.
“No, but I would really like to see the doctor, today”
“Well it’s a bit packed today, but if you are willing to wait I will see if I can squeeze you in… Are you alright with that?
He looked back into the waiting room, he scratched his head as if in deep thought, what he really was thinking was should I tell her my dad has a pile of money and could buy this two bit surgery, time is money, and it waited for no-one.
“I can wait” he said out loud instead.
“I’ll need your details so I can create a patient file for you. Name”
“They call me XMan”
“Excuse me Mr X but I need your government name and residential address”
He sighed, and ran a hand through his locks “Xinyori Mari, address__”
“Hold on how do you spell that”
He wanted to say you spell it “T H A T” but he instead spelt his name, and gave her his residential address.
As she was filling out the forms he had a good look at her, she must have sensed the scrutiny because she suddenly looked at him. 
“Is everything OK?”
“Can’t breath” and in his head added you take my breath away, then said “Can I have a glass of water.”

“There is a water dispenser in the waiting room and tumblers are just beside it,  please serve yourself. Just fill this in and you can go sit. I will call you when the doctor can see you.”

“Thank you.” he said walking back to the stool he had been sitting on.
Someone else was sitting on it.
This is like a game of musical chairs he thought, you stand up and someone takes your seat.
He eyed his fellow patients some were really ill, particularly the old lady whose chair was beside the coffee table he was considering to sit on. What if I catch what she has he shuddered.
Casually he walked up to her tried not to stare or breathe, he held his breath as he dragged the coffee table to what he judged a safe distance away from any of the other patients. A trail of magazines that had fallen from the table marked his path of retreat. Retreat that’s what he had done, retreat to the cold comfort of an unforgiving corner

Before he sat he picked up some of  the magazines avoiding the ones that had somewhat dubious stains. He tried not to even speculate on what the stains could have been.

After browsing through a couple, he realized they were all old editions, their pages would have been yellow with age had it not been for the old fancy glossy finish and the sample perfumes on the fashion pages saved them from that musky smell of old paper. The Scent of an Unforgettable Woman, read the caption on one of the pages.

The were crossword puzzles in some of the magazines, but they were all completed, badly.

Five down, the sea of tranquility calls this home, someone had scribbled MARS.
How he wished he had a pen, a red one, for corrections. He imagined pricking his finger and correcting the puzzle in his own blood. Blood was red__

His phone rang, he had forgotten to switch it off or put it on silent. There was a sign clearly prohibiting phones, everyone was looking at him and a security guard by the door was already heading his way.
He glanced at the phone screen, it was one of the First Street Savings bank numbers, probably his father calling to ”talk” about his stunt at the bank, he switched the phone off, daddy dearest could wait.

“Sorry” he signaled to the guard showing him that the phone was now off.

Five down was MOON not MARS, which was a red planet; Five across. Someone had written MERCury, of course it would not fit, he sighed.

A pen, his kingdom for a pen.
One of the patients had a hacking coughing fit and tucked behind his ear was a pen. Nope, he was most certainly not going to ask for it especially since he had seen him biting it earlier.

The heat in reception was stifling, a noisy overhead fan spread hot air around, the Met department had said something about a heatwave. He got up, walked to the water dispenser, selecting the cleanest tumbler he could find, then rinsed it, just to be sure. He took a sip, brackish and poured the rest into a large leafy pot plant just beside. The plant was artificial, great. Just great.
“I am in hell” he thought.
Hell is a waiting room.

~~The End
My entry #Blogbattle  entry themed Mars.
It is a continuation (of sorts) Of Dreadful Intentions.
~B

PS Colleen this is for you.

Responses to “Of The Waiting Room”

  1. #BlogBattle Week 32 “Mars” Entries & Voting | Rachael Ritchey avatar

    […] Of the Waiting Room by Beaton M. @ Becoming the Muse […]

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  2. Sarah Brentyn avatar

    Nice one! I can totally envision this place. I’ve BEEN in this place. It IS hell! 😀 (Although, for some reason, I have Pat Benatar’s “Love Is A Battlefield” stuck in my head now except with the lyrics “Hell Is A Waiting Room” instead and, yes, I know I’m strange.)

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Hahaha I know right one must bring a book ^_^

      oh no now that’s stuck in my head too 😱
      Hell is a waiting room.

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      1. Sarah Brentyn avatar

        I know. Those magazines are still giving me the heebie-jeebies. *shudder*

        We are strong
        No one can tell us we’re wrong
        Searching our hearts for so long
        Both of us knowing…
        Hell is a waiting room

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  3. Colleen avatar

    A whole blog post for me *insert shocked face and potential falling to the floor* LOL!!! This was a good read as always! I loved it. Wait is Xinyori the spoilt brat?

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    1. Beaton avatar

      hahaha you are welcome ^_^ but for real you, you helped make this happen, make it a series you said, well I havent figured out where the story is going yet, your guess as good as mine, I have given myself a new challenge, to connect up seemingly random short stories into one super complicated messy story, its like a regular complicated story, but it wears a cape, with an S on chest thatstands for super…(i might have let cat out of the bag but thats my genius mastermind plot) Spot on Xinyori is the “spoilt brat” guess who was calling dum duum duuum *suspense music beat*

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      1. Colleen avatar

        Niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice I love it!!!! And when the book is published, I will be first in line to buy it…oooops did I just add more pressure? I really didn’t mean to *said in an evil sarcastic voice*

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      2. Beaton avatar

        A Lil pressure turns rocks into diamonds ✨
        ^_^
        I don’t know about being first in-line, you would have to fumobata jongwe muromo cause the list is growing to buy the book that currently exists only in my, imagine, I appreciate the support all the same.

        ^_^

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      3. Colleen avatar

        Aaah I’m not the only one waiting for that book? Niiiiiiiice! You know what they say about giving the fans what they want? Yes we shall be patient.

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  4. Let's CUT the Crap! avatar

    The whole world can relate to this story. Sick and sitting in a doctor’s office with all the other sick people is asking for trouble. 😆 I like the poor sick guy. He has a strong presence here. 🙂 🙂

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    1. Beaton avatar

      hahahahaha waiting room blues… one must carry own book….
      yep he is quite the character with his aside thoughts

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      1. Let's CUT the Crap! avatar

        Keep personal book in a plastic wrapper. Fun to read too.

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      2. Beaton avatar

        Ah yes excellent tip that! Plastic is easy to clean and cheap to throw away ^_^

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      3. Let's CUT the Crap! avatar

        And keeps germs at bay. Ha ha ha.

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      4. Beaton avatar

        That is vital…. Sometimes I feel a few germs away from walking around in a hazmat suit 😷

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      5. Let's CUT the Crap! avatar

        Ha ha ha. What a world we live in.

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      6. Beaton avatar

        What a time to be alive ^_^

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  5. Rachael Ritchey avatar

    I got so excited when I realized this was a continuation! Great read. I was totally in the sick waiting room with Mr. Rich Banker’s Son. 🙂

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Thank you Rachael ^_^
      I had an epiphany ^_^ seen the need for having continuations, an explanation if you will of why a character acts the way they do (like Mr Rich Banker’s son if he suddenly decided he didn’t like waiting and pulled out a knife to jump to the front of the line, then apologize after and offer to pay everyone’s bill you know he tots could right?) so a character background I guess, (stuff not enough in just one story even if the two stories can be independent of each other ) l am fairly sure there is a writing term for that…. Oh am making this up as I go along *me explaining away in case this doesn’t come out the way I mean to say it* lol

      You will get sick waiting Anyhoo that’s Joys Of The Waiting Room for you 🙂
      Thanks again
      ~B

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      1. Rachael Ritchey avatar

        You’re too funny, B. 🙂 I totally get what you’re saying!

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      2. Beaton avatar

        I been told my thought process is somewhat “interesting”

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      3. Rachael Ritchey avatar

        Mine is really quite similar! 😀

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      4. Beaton avatar

        Hahaha awesome thing about the creative people, yes? People might love to read your stuff, but watching how the stories gets spawned leaves them shaking heads and wondering if you an alien as they ask how did you even think that….
        I don’t know I just did lol

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      5. Rachael Ritchey avatar

        Haha yes. Exactly. 🙂

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  6. phoenixgrey85 avatar

    Hell is a waiting room. – This is so true. Oh, I’ve been there so many times. Brilliant;y captured, and I love that we got to see through the “bank robber’s” eyes. 😀

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    1. Beaton avatar

      waiting room drama for you….

      ^_^ awesome glad you loved it.

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  7. currentlylovingsimplicity avatar

    Love this: “An impatient patient. The irony.”
    And great how you captured the atmosphere of the waiting room!

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    1. Beaton avatar

      The irony right!!!!!
      Waiting rooms are so not fun places ^_^
      Thanks for popping by glad you loved it.
      ~B

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  8. cathleentownsend avatar

    What happens to the current magazines in the waiting room? I rarely see them. Perhaps there’s a special pixie–related to the one who steals your socks–who makes sure mags are hidden until they’re at least four months old.

    I would LOVE to never have to wait in another waiting room. 🙂

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Hahaha where do the current issues go?! Excellent question Cathleen.
      Something that lives in the sock drawer is stealing socks, I would not be surprised if it had a new issue magazine stealing cousin 👻

      Hahaha don’t we all ^_^

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  9. Rawls E. Fantasy avatar

    Waiting rooms, yep, ugh. 😀 You captured them perfectly!
    I’m happy this is a continuation!
    “XMan” Lol!!! XD

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Hahaha waiting rooms hey.

      Yep XMan you will see him around lol

      Thanks ^_^

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      1. Rawls E. Fantasy avatar

        What does he look like? Gotta know or I won’t know when I see him. 😀

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  10. bobbibowwoman avatar

    Nicely done. I like the trail of magazines!!! So nicely worded.

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    1. Beaton avatar

      If you drag a table full of magazines they will fall (I have seen this haha)

      Thanks glad you like it ^_^

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  11. Vincent Wambua avatar

    Great Blog…amazing posts nicely packaged with practical ideas and gems of wisdom! I had to rate this 10/10! Cheers 🙂

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Thank you for the high rating appreciate you stopping by
      Cheers
      ~B

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Thanks ^_^

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  13. davidpr86 avatar

    Is that GQ bro at the doctors rooms?

    I need to change my doctor..lol 😂

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    1. Beaton avatar

      Hahaha it could be Glamour magazine all you see is the letter G. And it is an old old issue 😋

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  14. Stephanae V. McCoy avatar

    The waiting room was so realistic I found myself reaching for my antibacterial. Great post as always B!

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    1. Beaton avatar

      The joys of the waiting room lol

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  15. Liz avatar

    I can so relate to the environment, you paint so vivid a picture

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    1. Beaton avatar

      I figured you would…..hahahahaha thanks 🙂
      ~B

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  21. Shuvai Mlilo avatar

    Great story telling uncle B.

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    1. Beaton avatar

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